January 14, 201214 yr sir g bhot he maza a raha hai lakin thra sa update zeada he kai kare ap ke mahrbani ho ge
January 14, 201214 yr Wah G Wah Bari Hottt Update hai Aik Dam Mast Shkuriya DR Khan.... Keeep IT Uppp
January 14, 201214 yr lagtha hai yhan per eik tu gi.... but story still going on very well hot updates ab saba ke sath kya kerne wale hein... dekthe hein..?
January 15, 201214 yr kia baat he . wah. aaj tak kafi stories perhi hein bt sb mein 1ya 2 batein itni common hein k hnsi ati he k ye log ya to khud bewaqoof hein ya in ko sx ka experience hi nahin he. common batein jese k , os ne black bra pehna hoa tha aur gora bdn chalak raha tha, ya pehli dfa hi bachi ne khud se demand kerni start kr di k andr dalo ya isi tra, mra experience zra ht k he , but after reading ur story i can say it is story but written v carefully and most of the tym ur observation is v keen, u hav this talent of writing, 1 thing k just try to b more realistic like it is hardly once in a blue moon wali baat he k u sx in open place, nd hav no clothes on u, but use of places and names are v good, as the real names connects the virtual world to the real one, at the end u r awsm nd ur character Jameel is just about to fall in love, that is good, gradually matured , so keep it up, and if u hav som tym then just watch the tv show Calcification i hope it ll give u new concepts . and try to watch it form the Ist season nd i think now its 5th or 6th season is going on, best of luck nd hav a great tym,
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